Dogs Of War - the graphic novel

I've decided to work on a graphic novel, based on my dog characters and the cartoon series I wish to make out of them. I still want the cartoon made, but for now a graphic novel might be an easier way to create awareness of my ideas (which ultimately is what I want). Here are the roughs of a couple of pages from the first issue (or 'episode' as I'll probably call them).
Sorry if you can't read the text but to give you an idea on what is happening here, Stylene (the girl) is telling her dad that she wants to fight the enemy of the story. Her dad then eagerly begins to get her organised